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Shame on me for lurking for so long! *holds out hand, and Jack slaps the back of it with a ruler* Er...right.

Anyways, I was just going through the lists, reading and rereading some stories, trying to figure out why I love Jack/Will so much, realizing that it's unavoidable, and just doing it anyways. ^__^

SO! I decided to review you to motivate you! After all, we all loveses the pirate action! *innocent grin* Oh, and I don't know about the Seraph, but I'VE been lazy in writing. Shame on me! *both Elven and Jack share a look before he tosses the ruler and walks out muttering* *shrugs* Meh...*rolls eyes*

Okay! The parts I loved the best!

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// I think he means me. You know, when you called me a “conniving little bastard”. I still haven’t heard an apology, you know.

And you never will. //

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// “Does it tell you to do things?”

What is this, an interrogation? I wanted a conversation, not an assault.

“Yes. I mainly ignore them. It is an annoying little thing. Doesn’t do a damn thing I tell it.” Apparently, I felt inclined to answer every one of his questions.

It? I’m not that bad.

What would you prefer to be called? You don’t sound like anything so I can’t call you ‘him’ or ‘her’. //

(Elven: LMAO when he just sprung the question back on it/him/her/thingy!!!)

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// “Will, what do you think you are doing?” Shush, you will ruin it.

“I thought you wanted me to go to sleep.”

“Yes. In your bed.” Don’t you dare try to shove me onto the floor.

“Jack,” I murmured into the small space between us, “I’m not going anywhere.” //

(Elven: Shove him to the floor! Just the idea was amusing! And if he had said "Shush, you will ruin it" out loud, I would have LOVED the expression on Jack's face!)


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// If I can’t get what I want by being relatively direct, I’ll work towards it. I want Jack in my bed. If I can’t have that, I’ll just have to go to his. There had better be somen gon good fucking soon, or I’m going to have to find someone else. //

(Elven: NO finding anyone else, Will! *points finger threateningly* Besides, you know that you want Jack, and it shouldn't take much to seduce him...I mean, he can USUALLY take nt, nt, but...*shrugs*)

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// I woke up to the feeling that someone was staring at me. Keeping my eyes closed, I assessed my surroundings, and realized were I had ended up the night before. I could feel Jack’s breath on my face but before I could comment, he began to speak.

“An angel. You look like an angel when you are asleep.” Jack was whispering, apparently not knowing that I had already awoken.

Opening my eyes, I startled him. He moved away from me slightly, breaking the closeness.

“And when I’m awake? A fallen angel maybe?” Jack looked pained at the question.

“You are not a fallen angel.”

“Fallen angels have descended from heaven, leaving behind their loving creator.” I tried to explain to him why I felt that I had fallen.

“Yes, but why?”

“Well… because all angels are given a choice. But once they descend from heaven, they can not go back.”

Jack looked into my eyes, pleading with out words.

“They had free will, they weren’t forced lyou.you. You didn’t want this. You didn’t fall, Will. You were pushed. It’s not the same.”

“But I can’t go back.”

“You can if you want to.” He leaned towards me, placing his lips on my forehead.

It feels so good. The tugging is strong and I can’t move. So I’ll just stay like this until he gets tired of it.

Damn it. There isn’t going to be any morning sex, is there? //


(Elven: Okay, the dialogue in this scene was amazing. It was an intense moment, just with the words spoken, and with the emotions conveyed when you wrote out how Will was feeling. KUDOS AND COOKIES!!!! *hands cookies*)

Elven: Please! PLEASE! Update soon!!!! I want to see some more! Don't give up on this story! *hands more cookies as bribes*

Will: *sighs*

Jack: O__o???

Elven: *thinks* *hands rum as bribe too*

Jack: *follows rum*

Elven: -__-;;;;;;;

*sits patiently awaiting next chapter. Taps fingers on desk* Tra la la Tra la la. I l I lurves 'your' Will, really I do. And you are excellent with keeping the story going and intresting without throwing in a bunch of pointless sex. Kudos. *applauds* Kitty says he loves you, btw. Says you mgreagreat happies. o^.^o

*goes back to waiting. Draws Will/Jack smut in the meanwhile.*

that's so ironic! ur birthday's the same day's as hitler's. i absolutely love what you've done with the fic. will's amazing. please, please update your next chapter~
i hwillwill gets hurt more. poena is awesome too.

woooah what's happened tothe story? I havent seen anyupdates for ages!!

Happy belated birthday! Hope it was a good one. So, the voicce has a "name" now. You should make it come out more often, ya know, just to cause trouble. Voices are so good at causing trouble and it can be pretty amusing at times. Anywayz, I'm rambling again. Good chapter. I'm eager to read more.

talk about your massive role reversal dude!!!! i LOVE it!!!!
so many things that i just adored in tpartpart...i'll try not to prattle too much but here we go;

Will annoying Jack = classic funniness!!!
Will moving closer and closer to Jack without him realising = classic funniness!!!

/”I will be referred to as Poena. You will address me as such.”
“Cheeky little thing, aren’t you?” /

lol, i'd say!!! my jaw nearly dropped when the voice just started making orders of Jack like that...too bad you can't bitch slap the voice without bitch slapping Will!!!!

/“I thought you wanted me to go to sleep.”
“Yes. In your bed.” Don’t you dare try to shove me onto the floor./

lol...i was sorta hoping Jack would try that...just for a laugh!

/There had better be some damn good fucking soon, or I’m going to have to find someone else. /

NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! Good things come to those who wait Will dude...so wait...don't go looking for it elsewhere!!!!

i could go on and on about almost every word that came out of Will's mouth because it enthralls me so...and as for not letting me have Will in jar...*pouts* well there's not much i can say about that really...how about if i just take him every other wed :)d :)

keep writing!!!!

Hi,

I think the story is wonderful. I am now waiting breathlessly for the next pa May Maybe Will will finally be the smart-ass he is inside, outloud, that'd be too funny, I'd love to see Jack's reaction. *smiles* I hope you have some of the next chapter written, because I am hanging and wanting to read more.

Sincerely,
Sarah

Yay! New chappie! Ya know,m som so glad you decided to get Will drunk. I kthatthat if he were in my possession i would want to make him drunk. And what a to eto end the chapter. You've sent my mind to a naughty place and i can only hope that you see things the same way. Can't wait to see what you have in store.

Forgive me for not reviewing earlier! I have no idea what the last thing I said was, but I'm grateful that Will now knows that the voice in his head is evil and he's more or less stopped listening to it. I'm thinking that there's more going on with Jack, but as the story's not told from his point of view I'm not too sure how he feels. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Yep, nicely done. Very nicely done. Great story, thank you for taking the time to write and post it so that others can enjoy it.