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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good beginning I hope there is more where this came from....Spider
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good start. I like the way you introduce all your characters and I can just imagine Nols'a anger that Aid'ian wants an Ooman over her. Classic. I will be waiting for more.
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this sounds like a wicked beginning, i hope more comes soon!
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
well I'm hooked, please write more.
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm reading it and you can not stop me. This is looking awesome to me: Girl wants Guy, Guy want another Girl and she wants... well we don't know what she wants so you have to fill us in. Congrats and welcome and I love it... The_Malestrom
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Write more please this is going to be a favorite of mine. Excellent start real grabber.
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh she scored about a seven on the Bitch meter. I don't know about you but if I would have stared or spoke to my father like that; Mannnn!!!!. I love how you have Santana acting around Aid'ian not too sure and not fearful. The part when he wanted to cut Nola made me laugh. This is Awesome. I think Aid'ian will work out a plan to get his Santana. UPDATE
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh you have to update this. I love it already and you only have two chapters. Well written is all I have to say. MORE PLEASE
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story. This is wonderful and entertaining. I found myself saying awww when I got to the end of the chapter. I WANT MORE!!
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You know that now that you have created this monster you must help it grow. Your characters are humanlike. Hey I'd kill someone if they talked about my mother. Nola needs Loki to take her down a notch. This ia a keeper for me write on.