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I am so proud of you and the way this story is going. Keep up the good work. It really ia looking wonderful..........

Ar'Shiya
"LETS' RIDE"

Yay! An update. I'm soo happy to have something to read again. And I loved the pic of the PredAlien with the Hot chick. Very nice. I like the humor at the end of this chapter. I can't wait to see what happens next...

I really like it so far, and can't wait for the next chapter, please update soon.

Wow, great start, I can't wait to see what will happen next. Update soon

Looks great! Can't wait to see what's next

The story is going good, but I need a copy of it to run through microsoft works, the sentences are breaking apart.

Ar'Shiya
"LETS' RIDE"

Meh, it's not that big of a deal. I mean, you kinda HAVE to end the chapter there. And I did not expect to see any time travel, so kudos to you. Keep up the great work! =D

I like this story and look forward to reading more. however, with all due respect to Joss, he/she is wrong. words are the tools a writer uses to paint a picture and good spelling and grammar make all the difference in improving the readability of the story. Please do not take this as flaming, but your story has potential and would benefit from being spell checked or beta read. I know how difficult it is towrite in a language that is not your own, I've done it and have alot of respect for you for the effort you have made. I beleive in telling the truth in a review. As a writer, I've discovered that people telling me they love the story is great encouragement, but it does not help me to improve. good luck and keep writing.

WOW! i really liked the beginning!^^ this seems like it's going to be an awesome story so please update soon!^^ and don't worry about spelling errors too much, is someone doesn't understand what you mean w/ the sentence, "Running threw(should be through^^) the deep bush to their favorite place", then they must be extremely stupid^^ Besides it doesn't have to be perfect, though improvement is always a good thing^^

Yeah, because everyone just loves to read a story stuffed full of ridiculously broken grammar and countless spelling errors... that's truly the core of great writing!