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January 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
"Jack smirked, eyes glinting, but rememering Barbossa's earlier threat, didn't say a word. He reached a hand under the covers to stroke over Will's closest knee." -- That he still doesn't say anything... it just breaks my heart.
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"Com'on lad, better here, than up there." Jack whispered, rubbing Will's arm, and keeping wary eyes on the captain. -- The ever defiant Will... God, I love him.
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"Jasmine, I thifor for the boy." -- I already said how much I like this. Each of them has a particular scent that Barbossa likes them to use. Just another "you're my plaything" moment, or more subtle conditioning? You decide. *wink* LOL. I also want to take the opportunity to address what a voyeristic bastard Barbossa is. Hehehe...
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"pulling Will out of the water, and running a searching, and invasive hand down the slick body, while his tongue invaded the mouth, walked Will backward to the bed before pushing him down,and then hooked the latch onto his collar." -- I don't know why this catches the breath in my throat, why it seems so much worse than some of the other things he's done, but it does.
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"There's nothin' to be done 'bout that, lad. Don't tell him that, he's likely to pass ye to the crew, if'n ye tell him to not touch ye." Jack said solemnly. -- Oh God, you can FEEL how much he hates having to say that. You can tell just from the words that all he wants to do is wrap his arms around Will and say "I won't let him hurt you..." But he can't. He't,'t, and he knows it, which is all the more tragic.
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They are so cute. Will is all shy and timid and Jack is protective and gentle and it's all just so sweet that they can be that affectionate in the middle of all this horror.
You've done a marvelous job. Don't stop now!
Love,
Julie-Rae
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"Com'on lad, better here, than up there." Jack whispered, rubbing Will's arm, and keeping wary eyes on the captain. -- The ever defiant Will... God, I love him.
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"Jasmine, I thifor for the boy." -- I already said how much I like this. Each of them has a particular scent that Barbossa likes them to use. Just another "you're my plaything" moment, or more subtle conditioning? You decide. *wink* LOL. I also want to take the opportunity to address what a voyeristic bastard Barbossa is. Hehehe...
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"pulling Will out of the water, and running a searching, and invasive hand down the slick body, while his tongue invaded the mouth, walked Will backward to the bed before pushing him down,and then hooked the latch onto his collar." -- I don't know why this catches the breath in my throat, why it seems so much worse than some of the other things he's done, but it does.
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"There's nothin' to be done 'bout that, lad. Don't tell him that, he's likely to pass ye to the crew, if'n ye tell him to not touch ye." Jack said solemnly. -- Oh God, you can FEEL how much he hates having to say that. You can tell just from the words that all he wants to do is wrap his arms around Will and say "I won't let him hurt you..." But he can't. He't,'t, and he knows it, which is all the more tragic.
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They are so cute. Will is all shy and timid and Jack is protective and gentle and it's all just so sweet that they can be that affectionate in the middle of all this horror.
You've done a marvelous job. Don't stop now!
Love,
Julie-Rae
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January 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You KNOW how much I love this story.
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January 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You're breaking my heart here!!! OH my LORD...
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I actually meant to review as I went but I can't breathe. But oh my GOD... seeing Jack and Will go through that, seeing them used against each other like that... I... Oh...
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BLOODY HELL, PEOPLE!!!
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Maybe... MAYBE now that I've read the whole thing through twice I can actually go back and review the way I like to review... Picking out the best bits and pointing out things that could be stronger. But that's TWICE now that I've intended to do that and have been so caught up in the story from WORD ONE that I couldn't do it.
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DemonicLittleGirl sent me this'a way and I will have to thank her profusely for the next 20 years of my life! This is just amazing. Everything from the collars to Will and Jack's quiet trust of each other, to Barbossa's hideousness... It's all wonderful. I can not TELL you how much I am enjoying this fic, nor can I BEG you enough to give me more! Babes in bondage. How much better can it get? What would I like to see more of? Well, I'd like to see the story progress. I'm interested in the corset idea. Actually, I'm intrigued by what the corset was doing in the Dutch captain's quarters anyway... might be a chance for an original character to make an appearance. I'd like to see how Jack plans on getting them out of this... but mostly I'd have to admit, I want to see more of the same. I love the forced compliance. Really, though, as a suggestion... Barbossa keeps threatening to turn one or both of them over to the whole crew. I'd like to see it happen. And really, as far as Barbossa is concerned, he thinks he has Jack broken, but Will I'm not so sure of. I'd like to see what kind of turture he would devise that wouldn't injure him too badly, that wouldn't marr his beauty.
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Ideas... Barbossa could adorn them both, piercing their ears, giving them rings, whatever makes them "prettier" to his eyes. Eventually, he could have them around the ship with him, once he's sufficiently assured of their obedience. I think Barbossa picking out Jasimine for Will was a brilliant idea and I'd like to see it go farther. Jasmine for Will, something different for Jack, and they'd be scents the two men would gto dto despise. Eventually, Barbossa could lend one of them out. It might be interesting play with the one left behind, especially if they could hear the other one unhappy.
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In conclusion, the whole thing is just masterfully written, and I'm going to try to go back and read/review it together now. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE write more!!!!
Love,
Julie-Rae
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I actually meant to review as I went but I can't breathe. But oh my GOD... seeing Jack and Will go through that, seeing them used against each other like that... I... Oh...
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BLOODY HELL, PEOPLE!!!
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Maybe... MAYBE now that I've read the whole thing through twice I can actually go back and review the way I like to review... Picking out the best bits and pointing out things that could be stronger. But that's TWICE now that I've intended to do that and have been so caught up in the story from WORD ONE that I couldn't do it.
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DemonicLittleGirl sent me this'a way and I will have to thank her profusely for the next 20 years of my life! This is just amazing. Everything from the collars to Will and Jack's quiet trust of each other, to Barbossa's hideousness... It's all wonderful. I can not TELL you how much I am enjoying this fic, nor can I BEG you enough to give me more! Babes in bondage. How much better can it get? What would I like to see more of? Well, I'd like to see the story progress. I'm interested in the corset idea. Actually, I'm intrigued by what the corset was doing in the Dutch captain's quarters anyway... might be a chance for an original character to make an appearance. I'd like to see how Jack plans on getting them out of this... but mostly I'd have to admit, I want to see more of the same. I love the forced compliance. Really, though, as a suggestion... Barbossa keeps threatening to turn one or both of them over to the whole crew. I'd like to see it happen. And really, as far as Barbossa is concerned, he thinks he has Jack broken, but Will I'm not so sure of. I'd like to see what kind of turture he would devise that wouldn't injure him too badly, that wouldn't marr his beauty.
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Ideas... Barbossa could adorn them both, piercing their ears, giving them rings, whatever makes them "prettier" to his eyes. Eventually, he could have them around the ship with him, once he's sufficiently assured of their obedience. I think Barbossa picking out Jasimine for Will was a brilliant idea and I'd like to see it go farther. Jasmine for Will, something different for Jack, and they'd be scents the two men would gto dto despise. Eventually, Barbossa could lend one of them out. It might be interesting play with the one left behind, especially if they could hear the other one unhappy.
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In conclusion, the whole thing is just masterfully written, and I'm going to try to go back and read/review it together now. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE write more!!!!
Love,
Julie-Rae
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January 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Meh, cute ^^;. rawr... okie, so it is really cute. and i can't review well, so...uh...cute?
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January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I Like it, I love Jack, that is why I love see him in danger jajajaj, Continue, savvy?
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January 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ack - need more! brilliant story! short review ;)
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December 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
*Jumps up and down* Corset! I vote for Corsets! *cough*
^_^ Sorry you have been un-inspired recently. I understand all too wel can can't wait for your update when it does occur however.
^_^ Sorry you have been un-inspired recently. I understand all too wel can can't wait for your update when it does occur however.
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December 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ooooh Jack in a corset (jumps up and down in happyness) Pritty please?
Vampire Jack sounds cool,but please continue this story it's so good, your a genius.
Vampire Jack sounds cool,but please continue this story it's so good, your a genius.
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December 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
i love this story so far, and can not wait to read more. I totally love the collar idea.
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December 8, 2003 at 12:00 AM
inspiration is good... want this story to continut'st's good!
and I love vamp fics :D just as long as it's Jack/Will ;)
good luck with the inspiration!
and I love vamp fics :D just as long as it's Jack/Will ;)
good luck with the inspiration!