Rivers Run Deep

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Disclaimer: I do not own the concept of the Predator. whatever you don't recognize, is mine however.




Authors Notes: Full Disclaimer at the begining of the first chapter.



Author: Charlotte (jemstone5)

Email: jemstone5

Feedback: Please, yes lots.

Forward to others: would be flattered if you did.

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Rivers Run Deep



Reviews for Rivers Run Deep, Special eddition chapter, reviews from continuation of story, durring site transfer.



Lorna 2006-04-25 id # 3000000488

See now *sighs* I got to back and read all the chapters before Jemstone5. You probably have never had anyone write this but don't update let me catch up!!! LOL GLAD YOU ARE HERE.




chancelor22 2006-04-25 id # 3000000492

Yay! Another one returns! I am sooo happy! I love this fic and am glad that I get to see the end of it. I can't wait for more!





jemstone5 2006-04-26 id # 3000000520

Sorry Lorna. :D I'm catching up on all my hand writen notes i took while my computer was in the shop. I decided, for the better i feel, to sell my desk top system and keep my laptop. it goes with me everywhere anyway, and i'm on it more than my desk top. so, i'm updating like mad. :D take care all. hope to have a new chapter up either later today or tomorrow. ENJOY!! :D





caz 2006-04-26 id # 3000000535

to use the immortal words of beavis and butthead: He's never gonna score! He's never gonna score!



sorry. heh.



Okay, just shoot Kire'baa and toss his useless corpse into space... or feed him to the fuckin' bugs. What a fuckstick.



Ver'on is in deep shit. Honestly, he should have told her from the beginning... a truth told earlier would hurt less. Now it'll rip her to shreds.



Hopefully things will work out sooner or later, those two seriously need to get laid. I can just see Ver'on's head exploding in his impatience.





Lorna 2006-04-27 id # 3000000544

I was only kidding!!! Please post more and don't listen to me. Glad you aare here again.





chancelor22 2006-04-27 id # 3000000565

How could you do that to us...your loyal fans??? I am speechless! I can't wait for the next chapter. I NEED to know what happens. NOW!!!



BTW, I loved it. I simply love the way you write.





Vixey (Email hidden) 2006-04-27 id # 3000000568

great story so far, keep up the good work. i am anxious to see what comes next and if she will still accept him





The_Malestrom 2006-04-29 id # 3000000608

I have two words for you KEEP GOING PLEASE!!!! okay three words





prairiefire 2006-04-29 id # 3000000614

I was so worried after chapter thirty when there were no updates for months. This is a truly excellent story. Thank goodness you are back, but how can you leave us hanging like that.





jemstone5 2006-05-01 id # 3000000695

Hey prairiefire, and all my other readers, i am sorry for leaving you in the dark for so long. updates to my personal system hung things up a bit, then the site got moved, and now...well, i'm catching up on my hand written notes, and little by little the story is coming to you. i hope you enjoy reading it as much as i enjoy writing it. be well take care, and watch for more updates :D ** snickers ** cliffhanger in chapter 36...i will say no more.





missy 2006-05-01 id # 3000000706

no....way did you have to end it so soon. please update quickly. loving this story.





caz 2006-05-01 id # 3000000708

oh! OH! GOD YOUR EVIL!

you better damned well update fast cause you can't just stop in mid battle like that! GAH!

jeez!



oooooooooooooooooh... damn..

*sputters*



heh.





chancelor22 2006-05-01 id # 3000000717

NNNOOOO!!!! Cliffhangers!! I love to hate them. You have to update soon!! I demand it, It was great by the way!





caz 2006-05-01 id # 3000000723

i can't help it, every time I read that last chapter there, (despite the midbattle INTERRUPTION!!!), I get this visual of every male n the room looking at El and growling 'puuuusssyyyyy'...

Bahahaha.,



i need help.





Chancelor22 2006-05-03 id # 3000000772

More, More, MORE!!! I am not really sure how I made it through that chapter! I think my heart stopped at least a few times! You are such an awesome writer. I can't wait for more, more, more!





missy 2006-05-03 id # 3000000777

no that's just wrong but having M'pa be alright would make up for it. Please don't hold on the smut...really needing it here.





prairiefire 2006-05-03 id # 3000000783

crying out loud, I was so worried it was Lee'tha that fell on the spear. i could see her doing it to protect her friend. while I am bummed that M'Pa got hurt, it kinda served him right for not being straight with Ver'On and El. yeah, for him for not dying, he is one strong yautja.





Sara (Email hidden) 2006-05-09 id # 3000000864

Oi! I can't log into my account! But at least I can leave reviews as a guest.



Anyway, I am so glad you picked up on this story despite the database problems aff is having. I really hope other Predator fic authors follow suit and just carry their updates over to the new archive.



This story is progressing very well, with some nice twists. I can't wait until you write 'the gathering' act. =)



-Sara





jemstone5 2006-05-09 id # 3000000866

as you all have probably seen, the log in section is a little off kilter. i have chapter 38 complete and ready for upload, and hopefully another chapter will be ready by the time the site allows us to log in again. just wanted to keep you eager beavers updated. take care. =)





chancelor22 2006-05-15 id # 3000000923

YAY! I am so glad that everyone is OK. With all the twists, I was sure something bad was going to happen! I love this story. I can't to see what happens next. Waiting patiently...





Anna (Email hidden) 2006-05-15 id # 3000000924

This story is EXCELLENT!! I can't stop reading it. El is such a brave woman. She really kicked those guys butts! I hope that she will be able to expose Ver'on's great grandfather for the bastered he is. Sol is a great character. We he got mad at El because he thought she lied I wanted to smack him, but it all worked out. I am sitting on the edge of my seat waiting to read what will happen next! Keep up the excellent work, and please keep those chapters coming!!!!!!





caz 2006-05-17 id # 3000000931

OH! YOU ARE CRUEL!

goddamn it...

all worked up and now I gotta wait for a bloody UPDATE!!!

if they get interupted i'll scream, i swear.






Tammatha (Email hidden) 2006-05-17 id # 3000000937

Greetings,



I just thought I should stop and tell you how much I am liking this story & to say keep up the good work!



Bright blessings

Tammatha





missy (Email hidden) 2006-05-17 id # 3000000938

wow loving this story please don't stop.






caz 2006-05-17 id # 3000000939

grr. dammit.

okay, hurry up with the damned gathering, you know how evil you're being, right?

Sadness? a bedroom? what? damn.





raizer (Email hidden) 2006-05-18 id # 3000011399

You are an excellent writer. It certainly isn't easy to describe a predator but your story is nicely descriptive where it needs to be. Really enjoyed it. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter....





prairiefire 2006-05-18 id # 3000011403

You are a very cruel writer. Tormenting and teasing El like that. Ver'On deserves the embarrasment of falling out of himself for what he and M'Pa have done to her. hehe.





Anna 2006-05-18 id # 3000011407

*Slumps down in seat* That is evil. I believe I'm getting as frustrated as El. The gathering can't get here fast enough!! I am really loving this story! I'm sitting on the edge of my seat waiting to read what will happen next. *gets on her knees* Please update soon!!!!!!!





Prairiefire 2006-05-25 id # 3000011455

So, you've finally given up teasing El and are just teasing us. This is a very well written chapter (41) with lovely descriptions. I really don't want this story to end.





chancelor22 2006-05-25 id # 3000011459

DAMN IT!!! How can you TEASE us like that? What are you doing? Trying to kill us? But, anywayz, I loved it! At least now I know they will finally get it on in the next chappy. After all this time, I think they deserve it! Can't wait...keep up the great work!





Anna 2006-05-26 id # 3000011465

WOW!! What a chapter that was. El sure did put that female in her place. *giggles* I'm a bit surprised that she had that much control considering all the teasing being done to her. I thought she was going to rip that female's head off. *more giggles* I'm so happy that finally we have reached the gathering (next chapter she finally gets what she wants. . .right?) I'm GREATLY looking forward to the next chapter!!! Keep up the excellent work, and PLEASE update soon!!





caz 2006-05-27 id # 3000011468

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahh! QUIT THAT!

Your worse than M'pa! hahahahahaha

update quickly.






chancelor22 2006-05-29 id # 3000011494

WOW!!!!! THAT WAS SO INCREDIBLE! It was so good that it has left me speechless. I kinda feel like Ver'On! After a build up like that, I am thoroughly spent!! Congrats girl. I can't wait to see what happens next.





caz 2006-05-30 id # 3000011504

*sigh*

thank you...





Anna 2006-05-30 id # 3000011505

WOW!! That was a wonderful chapter! It was action packed, There was a brief moment when I thought that El was going to be hurt in the process. It's amazing that after all that teasing she finally got what she wanted, and now she's still not completely satisfied. I can't wait to read what will happen next. I think it would be wonderful if M'Pa became their second mate. Though I'm wondering if El really would like that, but she might after the pleasure she received at the gathering. It might be worth her wild! *grins* Hey, if she doesn't want M'Pa she could always send him my way!!! *Big smile and lustfull eyes* I'm sitting on the edge of my seat. Keep up the excellent work and please update soon!!!





chancelor22 2006-05-30 id # 3000011514

Three wonderful chapters! I loved every minute of it. And now, back to the twists and turns. I love the way you write. Are you going to do another fic after this one? I would really love it if you would. Anyway, I'm so glad everything is ok for now, but can't wait for the action to return! More!





missy (Email hidden) 2006-05-30 id # 3000011532

love it, can't wait for more.





Anna 2006-05-31 id # 3000011542

Oh no!! Why did El have to insist that M'Pa go with Ver'on? Now she's in great danger. I don't like Fer'aza. Someone really needs to put her in her place AGAIN!! I don't want to see El hurt or labeled something she's not, nor do I want to see Ver'on or M'Pa disgraced. And I sure as hell DON'T want to see M'Pa with that THING. I'm still hoping that M'Pa becomes El and Ver'on's second mate!!! Good chapter. I am really looking forward to reading more. I hope Ver'on and M'Pa don't stay away long. Keep it up, and please update soon!!!





chancelor22 2006-05-31 id # 3000011552

Ha Ha! Throw it back in her face! I love to see ppls plans get ruined! That was great. I can't wait for more. This fic is what gets me thru the day!





shortest_warrior 2006-05-31 id # 3000011554

Suck eggs Fer'aza. She needs her high and mighty Yautja ass taken down a peg or two. And ditto on what Lee'tha said about mating one of mixed blood, I reckon you would get the best of both worlds MMMMM Yummy. I hope he takes some other Yautja female hotty and she sticks to Fer'aza as to what she missed out on.



It's so good to see everyone coming back. And I WANT MORE PLEASE. From everyone not just you. Which reminds me I should pull my finger out too shouldn't I.





Anna 2006-06-01 id # 3000011560

Excellent chapter!! I was worried there for awhile. I really thought that Tan was going to try and persuaded El away from Ver'on. El is really lucky to have Lee'tha there with her. *Laughs* Fer'aza plan back fired on her, which was rather amusing to read! I wouldn't put it past her to try again, but it looks like El has some new friends to watch over her. I think Fer'aza should get over M'Pa and get with J'on. He seems like the perfect mate for her. Although she can't see it. I loved how you incoporated another Yautja having a human mate. I think it eased El's mind a bit. Speaking of that. . . THEIR HAVING A BABY!!!!!! *Jumps around the room* I'm so happy for them! I can't wait to read what happens next. I hope nothing bad happens. Please don't make me beg. I'm sitting on the edge of my seat. Please update soon!!! Also keep up the amazing job that you have been doing!!! *Grins*





Anna 2006-06-01 id # 3000011561

Sorry in my excitement I realized that I can't spell with sh*t. I meant they're having a baby, but i think you get what I was saying. Now that I think about it. . . Fer'aza doesn't deserve J'on. But I leave that in your capable hands. *bows head* I forgot to say that I TOTALLY agree with Lee'tha about "the best of both worlds" comment. Mmmmmmm. Makes me wish I was on that ship with El!! This story kicks ass!! I absolutely love it. Keep it up! * Patiently sits by her computer waiting for the next chapter*





caz 2006-06-01 id # 3000011562

ahhh the plot thickens....





michelle marshall (Email hidden) 2006-06-02 id # 3000011581

this is one of the best stories i've read in a long time, please keep writing, you are fantastic at it. can't wait for the next chapters.





Chancelor22 2006-06-06 id # 3000011637

That was a great chapter. You sure do know how to make someone's heart drop and stop tho! Is M'Pa made of steel or something? He had better be. I will be very put out if he dies! Keep the updates coming!





shortest_warrior 2006-06-06 id # 3000011648

Poor El. I hope Kal doesn't decide to stick his bit in to help. It is after all what he wants to do. Please let M'pa survive I'm gathering that is why his heart sank. But it's your story and I'll read it anyway. Please jemstone5 I want more.





Prairiefire 2006-06-07 id # 3000011651

M'Pa is just a glutton for punishment isn't he. And females just can't stop themselves from fixing up couples can they. Kal is an idiot if he thinks that even on the slight chance that he defeated Ver'On AND M'Pa that El would have anything to do with him. I am sooo happy she is pregnant, she deserves this so much. I shudder to think what will happen once the baby's born if Fer'aza is still hung up on M'Pa. There could be fireworks there. Hopefully the Hur family has found a home. But it seems like there's "one" in every family. Kire'Baa, Fer'aza, always trying to make everyone else as miserable as them.



This is one story that can never end, I won't allow it. It is just too good.





Shortest_warrior 2006-06-07 id # 3000011669

I'm glad El didn't lose the baby and I can't wait until she tells Ver'on and M'pa. Kal needs to be seriously hurt for even thinking about taking El away from Ver'on. He wants to be very careful Ver'on will kick his ass and pity help when M'pa recovers.



Please let El agree to M'pa being her second mate, PLEASE.





prairiefire 2006-06-08 id # 3000011688

TRIPLETS!!!!! Are you serious? I said she deserved a baby, but man, a first-time mom with THREE newborns!, hybrids no less!! I so do(n't) want to see the mood swings that are coming. *impressed whistle*




michelle (Email hidden) 2006-06-11 id # 3000011747

I can't wait for the next chapters, this story just keeps getting beter and better, keep writing you are fantastic!!!!!!!





caz 2006-06-12 id # 3000011755

El's gonna do some ass-kicking? :D YAY!





prairiefire 2006-06-12 id # 3000011757

I was wondering when those hormones would kick in. Of course, they may send someone's foot into someone else's butt.



Anxiously waiting the next update.